This shows the books were sold at three bookstore in Bayside City in last year. Write at least 150 words.
p36 Bayside City Bookstores Report
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The diagram indicates how many books were sold last year at three bookstores located in Bayside City. Overall, Barnes and Noble bookstore accounted for the highest sales all year, peaking in the summer. Meanwhile, the sales figures for Frugal Muse, which were by far the lowest, and Cozy Corner fluctuated in the first half of the year, but grew overall.
As can be seen, Barnes and Noble sold nearly 25,000 books in the first month of the year before witnessing a steady increase to a peak of about 42,000 in August. In the remaining months, however, the figure fell sharply, ending at around 27,000.
In contrast, Cozy Corner book sales witnessed wild fluctuations in the first six months, but the trend was upward. After selling approximately 17,000 books in January, the number saw a two-fold increase by July. Subsequently, sales dropped markedly to 22,000 books sold in August, levelling off at this figure for the rest of the year.
Regarding Frugal Muse, the number of books sold fluctuated between 3,000 and 10,000 from January to September. Then, there was a gradual rise to a high of 12,000 books sold in December.
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The line graph illustrates how many books were sold at three bookshops in Bayside City last year. Overall, book sales in Barnes & Noble reached a peak in the summer, becoming the best seller whereas Frugal Muse had the lowest sales but an upward trend overall. Finally, Cozy Corner experienced wild fluctuations during the first half of the year before levelling off.
As can be seen, the number Barnes & Noble stood at under 25,000 in the first month, increasing gradually to a peak of approximately 42,000 in August before declining to a low of around 27,000 at the end of the period.
In contrast, Cozy Corner began at under 20,000 and then fluctuated between 15,000 and about 33,000 from January to July. Subsequently, there was a sharp drop to nearly 22,000 in August and this figure stayed unchanged till the end of the year. Likewise, Frugal Muse witnessed fluctuations over the first eight-months after starting at only 5,000 in January. This figure then reached a low of 15,000 in September before grew steadily to a high of just over 35,000 in December.
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The line graph shows how many books were sold at three bookstores within the last year of Bayside City. Generally, Barnes and Noble always be the highest sale following Cozy Corner and Frugal Muse which was the lowest overall.
Looking at the graph, Barnes and Noble rising steadily in the first two quarter before hitting a peak of more than 40,000 in August. However, the sale didn't last long as it fell sharply to the amount of below 30,000 at the end of the year.
At a sale of almost 17,000 in January, Cozy Corner in contrast had a wild fluctuations within the first six months. Reaching its top sale at nearly 35,000 when stepping throw July then drop awfully in August and leveling around 22,000 untill December.
Staring of really low at only 5,000 sales, Frugal Muse didn't make any progress in the first quater and subsequently hit the lowest sale of no more than 5,000 in May. However it started to rise gradually untill leaving other two behinf in October for 25,000 sales with Cozy Corner and in December for 35,000 more compaired to Barnes and Noble.
The line graph shows how many books were sold at three bookstores within the last year in Bayside City. Generally, all three of them had similar sales with their highest peaks during the third quarter. Barnes and Noble consistently had the highest sales following Cozy Corner and Frugal Muse which was the lowest overall. <<(you have not indicated the overall change (trend)
Looking at the graph, Barnes and Noble rose steadily in the first two quarters before hitting a peak of more than 40,000 in August <<What happened to January to July? No data?. However, the sales were short-lived as they fell sharply to the amount of below 30,000 at the end of the year. <<(incomplete line (no data for the first 7 months)
Similarly, with a sales of almost 17,000 in January, Cozy Corner in contrast had a significant fluctuation <<(what was the starting number? What was the range of fluctuation?) within the first six months. Reached its top sales at nearly 35,000 <<(when?) when stepping through July then dropped rapidly in August<<(number?) and leveling off around 22,000 until December.
Finally, starting at a rock-bottom 5,000 sales, Frugal Muse did not make any progress in the first quarter and subsequently hit the lowest sales of no more than 4,000 in May. However, it began to rise gradually until leaving the other two behind in October with 25,000 sales and December with 35,000 more compared to Cozy Corner, Barnes and Noble. <<(this is your only completed line)
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TA:4 Two of your three lines cannot be drawn. Also your overview must show overall change
CC: 5 Your trendlines are incomplete- reader cannot draw
LR: 7 GR:6 OVL: 5.5 A nice attempt but does not complete the task. Please see model.